Recently I was asked to do some revisions on a piece I wrote about my last trip to India. I was sharing experiences I had when I was injured in a fall in Delhi. Even though I was in a lot of pain I felt very close to God. It was all clear in my mind, but my ending was vague and needed work. My piece came back 200 words shorter and in my mind some of the best illustrations were axed. Still, the piece had merit and I was determined to find a clear and solid ending. I struggled with words and phrases until two things dawned on me. First I needed to anchor my words to a verse that helped me understand the feelings I had in relation to the experience. Second I needed to ask myself the question, “What exactly was I feeling at the time?” I came up with three words that pointed me in the right direction in tightening up the language for my final paragraphs. I felt isolated, frustrated and confused. Once I pinpointed those three words the rest of the revision process went smoothly. I know writers often ask themselves questions to be sure they’re saying exactly what they want to say. As William Zinsser says in On Writing Well, “Writing is hard work. A clear sentence is no accident.” Do you ask yourself questions when you write? Questions like, “What am I trying to say? Did I say it? Is it clear? What was I really feeling and seeing?” Try it because it is an effective strategy in the quest for clarity.
Finding Clarity
Posted on 2010/02/27 with 2 comments
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Hi Jan,
Have you read Nancy Atwell’s material on writing? She has lessons to help middle/high schoolers tighten up and clearly express their thoughts in their writing. Using her work and teaching suggestions helped me improve (and keep improving) my writing.
You’ve hit on some of the points of her lessons about clarity. When I read your piece, I thought of Atwell’s lessons. The struggles you shared are my struggles, too. Thanks for relating your experienes because it helps me know that others also think that writing IS HARD WORK!
P.S. Zinssr is her guru, too.
No, I don’t think I know Nancy Atwell’s work. But I’m relatively new to being aware of writing gurus. A friend recommended Zinsser’s book and I read another one of his, Writing About Your Life. It helped me to see that quality writing is neat and spare which allows the words themselves to do the work. I also found Sally Stuart’s Getting Published which combined with her market guide has made all the difference. The editing process is a lot like pruning shrubs which is probably why they use that word “prune” a lot. I realize when I’m editing my own work that I tend to make the same wordy mistakes over and over again. I’ll look Nancy Atwell up and see what she has to say.